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  • 5 mai 2007 00:50
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    Why



    So you wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?



    Why I write all the goddamn poems?

    Why I paint all the goddamn paintings?

    Huh?



    Why I started a band,

    just to fucking sing songs I wrote about you,

    on the off chance that you'd come to a show....

    or at least a friend of yours would

    and tell you how good it sounded?



    Seriously....aren't you curious?



    Why I planted all those goddamn pecan trees?

    Or baked strudel, for that stupid festival,

    for three days?



    Or why I rebuilt that shitty old Harley,

    even paying Richie to put the passenger saddle and pegs on,

    because I was afraid I would fuck it up and you'd fall off?



    Do you think this is normal for me?



    Wanna know why I clawed my way through grad school

    to get a decent job, t

    o earn three times what I need,

    in case we end up

    together,

    again,

    and you wanted to finish your education?



    Or why I waited in line for four fucking hours

    to get tickets for that stupid

    Spongebob Live show?

    Huh?



    Or why I went to the fucking airport,

    to get your kids,

    dressed as the damn Easter bunny?



    Seriously....

    Do you think I enjoy drawing that kind of fire?



    I buried my precious addictions,

    Sweetpea,

    And gave up my beloved war.



    They took me,

    kicking and screaming.

    And no one cares anymore

    except the cops

    and my mother.



    Goddamn it, It's you.



    It's always you.

    Every fucking time.

    Every waking second

    is a nightmare of desire.



    Wanna know why I can't fucking concentrate

    every time I smell honeysuckles?

    Or hear Dinosaur Junior?

    Or taste Cream Soda?

    Or drive past the cave,

    over by west campus?

    Or go fishing?

    Huh?



    Or why I fucking break down

    when the bats migrate?

    Or the butterflies swarm?

    Or the Mexican Squealers

    go south?



    I can't even stomach going to the waterfall anymore.

    And forget about swimming.



    Bitch.



    You wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?

    Huh....

    punk?



    BECAUSE IT'S FUCKING BETTER THAN BLOWING MY GODDAMN HEAD OFF!!



    That's why.
  • 5 mai 2007 10:51
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    Black Molly wrote:

    Why



    So you wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?



    Why I write all the goddamn poems?

    Why I paint all the goddamn paintings?

    Huh?



    Why I started a band,

    just to fucking sing songs I wrote about you,

    on the off chance that you'd come to a show....

    or at least a friend of yours would

    and tell you how good it sounded?



    Seriously....aren't you curious?



    Why I planted all those goddamn pecan trees?

    Or baked strudel, for that stupid festival,

    for three days?



    Or why I rebuilt that shitty old Harley,

    even paying Richie to put the passenger saddle and pegs on,

    because I was afraid I would fuck it up and you'd fall off?



    Do you think this is normal for me?



    Wanna know why I clawed my way through grad school

    to get a decent job,

    to earn three times what I need,

    in case we end up

    together,

    again,

    and you wanted to finish your education?



    Or why I waited in line for four fucking hours

    to get tickets for that stupid

    Spongebob Live show?

    Huh?



    Or why I went to the fucking airport,

    to get your kids,

    dressed as the damn Easter bunny?



    Seriously....

    Do you think I enjoy drawing that kind of fire?



    I buried my precious addictions,

    Sweetpea,

    And gave up my beloved war.



    They took me,

    kicking and screaming

    into adulthood...

    and no one cares anymore

    except the cops

    and my mother.



    Goddamn it, It's you.



    It's always you.

    Every fucking time.

    Every waking second

    is a nightmare of desire.



    Wanna know why I can't fucking concentrate

    every time I smell honeysuckles?

    Or hear Dinosaur Junior?

    Or taste Cream Soda?

    Or drive past the cave,

    over by west campus?

    Or go fishing?

    Huh?



    Or why I fucking break down

    when the bats migrate?

    Or the butterflies swarm?

    Or the Mexican Squealers

    go south?



    I can't even stomach going to the waterfall anymore.

    And forget about swimming.



    Bitch.



    You wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?

    Huh....

    punk?



    BECAUSE IT'S KEEPING ME FROM BLOWING MY GODDAMN HEAD OFF!!



    That's why.




    slight changes, after consulting my handlers.
  • 5 mai 2007 11:58
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    shushan wrote:

    BECAUSE IT KEEPS ME FROM BLOWING MY GODDAMN HEAD OFF!!



    i like the little salingerism.




    what's a salingerism?
  • 5 mai 2007 12:13
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    shushan wrote:

    JD HC catch her in the rye




    ok. sweetpea. spell it out. you are talking to a girl, who can barely sit still long enough to finish the back of a cheerios box, at breakfast.



    what is the difference between "Keeps me from" and "is keeping me from"?



    is it like some kind of play on words that people into books will pick up on?



    You must remember, Lit class was where we went to score pot, between trips to the river.



    also what is "HC"?



    BTW, UR FUKKING HAWT!!
  • 5 mai 2007 12:25
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    • lynn
    • Fille/38
    • SAN FRANCISCO, CALIFORNIA, US
    My what a rude young woman...
  • 5 mai 2007 18:31
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    Why is Gutter an 18 year old girl from Idaho?
  • 5 mai 2007 19:42
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    Lurinda wrote:

    Why is Gutter an 18 year old girl from Idaho?




    because this is America DAMNIT, and I can be whatever I want, just as long as i don't hurt anyone.



    also my other guy got deleted, for being a jackass. this is the account i use to put inappropriate comments on my main account.
  • 6 mai 2007 00:19
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    • Syntax
    • Fille/19
    • Nanaimo., British Columbia, CA
    I bet you're HAWT as a chick, Gutter.



















    That took everything out of me.







    [Bet'cha I'm right, though]
  • 6 mai 2007 01:16
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    perhaps consider a different format for these words?

    i think the delivery could be more effective

    lioness(?) is much stronger than this

    and this is potentially just as strong
  • 6 mai 2007 01:41
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    Why



    So you wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?



    Why I write all the goddamn poems?

    Why I paint all the goddamn paintings?

    Huh?



    Why I started a band,

    just to fucking sing songs I wrote about you,

    on the off chance that you'd come to a show....

    or at least a friend of yours would

    and tell you how good it sounded?



    Seriously....aren't you curious?



    Why I planted all those goddamn pecan trees?

    Or baked strudel, for that stupid festival,

    for three days?



    Or why I rebuilt that shitty old Harley,

    even paying Richie to put the passenger saddle and pegs on,

    because I was afraid I would fuck it up and you'd fall off?



    Do you think this is normal for me?



    Wanna know why I clawed my way through grad school

    to get a decent job, to earn three times what I need,

    in case we end up together again,

    and you wanted to finish your education?



    Or why I waited in line for four fucking hours

    to get tickets for that stupid Spongebob Live show?

    Huh?



    Or why I went to the fucking airport, to get your kids,

    dressed as the damn Easter bunny?

    Seriously...

    Do you think I enjoy drawing that kind of fire?



    I buried my precious addictions,

    Sweetpea,

    And gave up my beloved war.



    They took me, kicking and screaming,

    into adulthood, and no one cares anymore,

    except the cops and my mother.



    Goddamn it, It's you.



    It's always you.

    Every fucking time.

    Every waking second

    is a nightmare of desire.



    Wanna know why I can't fucking concentrate

    every time I smell honeysuckles?

    Or hear Dinosaur Junior?

    Or taste Cream Soda?

    Or drive past the cave

    over by west campus?

    Or go fishing?

    Huh?



    Or why I fucking break down

    when the bats migrate?

    Or the butterflies flock?

    Or the Mexican Squealers go south?



    I can't even stomach going to the waterfall anymore.

    And forget about swimming.



    Bitch.



    You wanna know why I fucking Love you so fucking much?

    Huh....

    punk?



    BECAUSE IT'S KEEPS ME FROM BLOWING MY GODDAMN HEAD OFF!!



    That's why.
  • 6 mai 2007 01:41
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    you think that's better fish? I combined a bunch of the shorter lines.
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