and now the dragon wakes slumber disturbed



opens one piercing eye and then he said



are you sure you wish to poke me with that stick sir knight ow a lance is it and just what do you propose to do with it



and he did reply



why foul dragon i plan to make a hero if myself by slaying you and severing your head



but sir knight i am fond of my head and tho you would wish to hear accolads in your name wouldnt it be easyer to make your fame walking the mortal plane for all that awaits you here is death and shame



and sir knight did reply



i do not fear you foul beast, i shall pierce you with my lance and sever you toothy head and make off with your treasure



why sir knight i have no gold no precious stones no coffers overflowing with wealth not a single solitary trinket all i posses is this heart and the head you wish to sever from me my only tokens are wisdom and these you may not recieve by slaying me and by the way dont call me foul i do not reek and am fairly clean



well dragon ,i do not fear you and have a quest to compleat, and with that statement did he foolish knight set to best the dragon for hours did he wail slash and jab but all to no avail and when he could no longer lift his arms to sustain the attack and his lance lay broken at the dragons feet and all his fury and will were exhasted did the dragon again speak



and this is what he said



my name is life i am you he and thee and tho you rage and slash cuss and redrease you can not slay me for i am all the things in you that you dispise and and you may not lay me low without killing the part of you that gives you strength the piece cannot be removed from the whole do not fight me but embrace me for you fight yourself and to slay me would diminish you/me



and the knight did say



whatever in the hell do you mean



and the dragon replied well sir knight one of us is not real one of us is dreaming and you wail at yourself or i at me for i do not know which of us is the shade and which the dreamer but this i do know there is a shadow of shame and flame in every soul and untill you embrace it and taste it you/me will never know piece



there may be a moral to this story but i guess what it is will be decided by the reader

Uhm... First, please spell check.

Second, punctuation.

Third, Grammar.

Fourth, Plagarism- I am fairly sure I read this somewhere before.

But I can't be sure, because the basics have been left out, and I couldn't get through it...

thanks Syntax... i didn't know where to begin.

Syntax [DF] wrote:

Uhm... First, please spell check.

Second, punctuation.

Third, Grammar.

Fourth, Plagarism- I am fairly sure I read this somewhere before.

But I can't be sure, because the basics have been left out, and I couldn't get through it...

dont care about the spelling and no this is mine

Hugh G Rection wrote:

this is the haters forum huh?

seems that way the children who think to speak on art without a life lived to draw from

Syntax [DF] wrote:

Uhm... First, please spell check.

Second, punctuation.

Third, Grammar.

Fourth, Plagarism- I am fairly sure I read this somewhere before.

But I can't be sure, because the basics have been left out, and I couldn't get through it...

its a form called run on when you attend something other than jr high you may learn of this

A run on Sentence?

That isn't a form, my dear.

That is a mistake, which I learned to correct in junior high.



Randi: He'll learn.

Syntax [DF] wrote:

A run on Sentence?

That isn't a form, my dear.

That is a mistake, which I learned to correct in junior high.



Randi: He'll learn.

you shall flunk that course, , never take a writing class, the teacher hates it when you are ridgid , and unteachable!

Hugh G Rection wrote:

this is the haters forum huh?

No. It's a literature forum with people in it involved in literature in various ways. If you put something up, the implied question is 'what do you think?' Writing is 90% people saying no and telling you you suck. If you get all snotty about what a few people here say then you may as well put down your pen and give up.



From the way the Op reacts it's clear he's not interested in writing or improving what he does. What he actually wants is us to appreciate his genius. Great, I'll do it, your a genius OP. Now sub this to a few paying markets and good luck.

How do I comment on my Literature award without seeming like a braggart?

I suppose I just won't.

I'll agree with RJ, bow my head, and move on.

Have a good day!

=)

It could be decent if it wasn't so obvious and you put it in some meter.